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Sone people think that newsapers are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#sone #people #newsapers #media #information #internet #source
During my undergrad, I excelled at several courses that would lay a solid foundation for the future.
For example
,
database
 design and implementation taught me how to use appropriate
data
 structures to efficiently process
data
-related operations on
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 with the help of
database
 features. I worked on a project to optimize the
database
 queries to work on a large scale of
data
, by analyzing the current
data
 architecture, optimizing the
data
 structure,
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 indexes, and modifying the queries to work with new
database
 partitions
as well as
 optimized indexes. I used the knowledge in
application
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 development course to develop my own program that integrated with the TensorFlow framework to classify different objects based on the predictions and trained
data
 models. It used a camera as a source video and displayed the output on the screen with real-time object detection,
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labels, and their accuracy. I
also
 completed several group projects during my undergrad.
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 development project taught me the importance of teamwork and how to manage
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tasks effectively. A course in operating systems taught me how to manage the memory of applications and how to the underlying abilities to operate systems for cooperation among different threads and processes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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