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Some people think that the government should decide the subject for students to study in university. Others believe that students should be allowed to apply for the subject they prefer. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Education is one of the most important components of a person’s life and any decisions related to
this
 should be his own. The idea that what
subjects
students
 need to learn has been widely discussed. In my opinion,
students
 should obey the scientific curriculums developed by the
government
, rather than learning
subjects
 of their interest. There is no doubt that the main purpose of providing the subject decided by the
government
 is to assist
students
 in improving their personal qualities and conforming to rules accepted by society.
Firstly
, many colleague
students
 lake some correct values and higher-level thinking skills,
while
 the
government
 emphasises the functions of liberal education,
such
 as self-management
courses
 and legal
courses
, which can effectively heighten their awareness of moral standards and help them assume responsibilities in society.
Secondly
, aside from theoretical knowledge, universities launch some communication curriculums. Some
students
 with communication barriers can improve their social skills and hone their communication skills. It is particularly true when many graduates require adaptability to the environment in the future. Meanwhile, elective
courses
 become popular and widely accepted by
students
 nowadays. Nowadays, the spare time of most
students
 is occupied by colleagues' education
courses
 and the content of the subject decided by the
government
 is relatively monotonous and even lacking some innovation. The
government
 and school indeed encourage
students
 to develop in the direction of the
subjects
 they are interested in, thereby giving a boost to the employability of graduates. As suggested in the above discussion, the role of
subjects
 decided by the
government
 is to hope that the student becomes more ethical and in an effort to make
students
 productive members of society. In their spare time, they can
also
 choose their favourite
courses
.
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