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A VISION OF SUSTAINABLE FOOD FOR A DECARBONIZED SOCIETY

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, there should be no waste leftovers from cooking. Every raw material should be used to the fullest possible value.
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 to saving money, it is
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 a good way to reduce
food
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 waste which in turn benefits the environment as well. You could search for creative ways to combine leftover
food
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 and transform them into new menus or consult a nutritionist for ideas.
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 presents a great opportunity to discover additional flavorful dishes.
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, the government should campaign to decrease the amount of meat consumption. Animal husbandry of cattle, buffaloes, sheep, goats, chickens, pigs, and other animals
release
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releases
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 high volumes of methane emissions into the atmosphere. If we can reduce our meat intake, it will
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 reduce methane emissions and in turn, effectively alleviate
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect and global warming. In conclusion, It can be clearly seen that sustainable
food
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 is a new trend for consumers
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 very popular today because it can provide consumers with complete nutrition, hygienic, clean,
safe
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and safe
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 from toxins.
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, it
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 helps consumers save costs in purchasing raw materials. The most important thing is, If everyone can do
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, it will reduce the amount of
food
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 waste and reduce the amount of CO2 gas that causes global warming. It is the management of existing resources for maximum benefit, to preserve the ecosystem and develop a production chain
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 environmentally friendly as the title

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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