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The grpah below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

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The given graph indicates the rate of goods from
Australia
 exporting to 4 different countries in
22-year
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period
 from 1990.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that China and India gained an
increase
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 import of goods from
Australia
 over the
period
while
the
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us and
japan
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Japan
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saw an opposite trend. Another striking factor is that the most significant growth
was record
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 in China. In 1990, japan accounted for the highest proportion of importing things from
australia
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, at just over 25%.
Then
, it declined steadily over the
period
 and hit bottom at approximately 17% in 2012.
In contrast
, China saw a dramatic rise from 1990 to 2012 and became the biggest exportation of
Australia
 at approximately 28% One prominent feature of
this
this
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data is the figure of
india
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 stabilized from 1990 to 2000 at about 1% and
then
 increased to 7% before
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 a slight decline to 5% in 2012.
In addition
, the US saw a fluctuation over the
period
 and end at about 7% in 2012, 4% lower than 1990.
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