Nowadays, many people have easy access to computers and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games. What can be done to minimize the bad effects?

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The emergence of technology is influential yet a failure
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it became part of our lives that gives amusement to
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, so many youths were influenced and enjoyed recreating a digital world. It is noticeable in our generation, that many youths do not even play traditional games. They are more inclined on having a personal space wherein they can play alone through digital advances.
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age of five a child already plays
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and
have
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a
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little knowledge about
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. It is threatening that technological devices had
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impact
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human beings. The potential negative impacts of playing computer games; playing excessively will harm
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health of an individual.
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leads to addiction that can affect the lifestyle of a person. In terms of academic performance in school, youths are being tempted
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their homework and projects in school because of disruptions and impacts of devices like
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, iPad and
computer
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. Sleep disturbance is
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an effect of playing abusively because it manipulates and decreased the resting time of a person.
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, it is not the end rather
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can do something efficient to minimize the regular use of technological devices. One of the major practices is the involvement of physical activities like basketball, badminton, soccer etc.
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examples of activities can build connections to other
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. Through
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, a youth can regulate his use of gadgets in which he will choose to be with his friends and have
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instead
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of sitting in a personal room and playing online games. To sum it up, modernity is beneficial but
people
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need to regulate the use of it. We should not be bound that technology can always make our lives meaningful rather it is the
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around us who
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our existence essential.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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