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the chart below discuss the data of studetns who are planning to study at 4 best universities of australia.

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The chart demonstrates the average
number
 of graduates who are looking to pursue their
PHD
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PhD
 programmes at the 4 best Australian universities in 2009 and 2019.
Thus
, it
also
 illustrates the speculated data of
students
 for 2029. In 2009 an excessive amount of
students
have
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planned to pursue their specialization in Queensland.
Additionally
, speculated data for 2029 is more than 90% accurate for all those
students
 who have planned to pursue their degree
at
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in
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 Queensland. Canberra is the only
university
 among all other universities in Australia, in which the
student's
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students
student
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 prefer to pursue their PhD in 2009 and 2019 are negligible.
Furthermore
, in 2019 and 2009 Newscastle is the only
university
, in which
a
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the
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number
 of
students
 is almost equal in
number
.
Overall
, Canberra is the only
university
 where speculated data for Canberra is lower than the
students
 who have planned to apply for PhD in 2009 and 2019.
Moreover
, an excessive
number
 of
students
 preferred to study Their specialisation at Newcastle
University
.
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