An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages or disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online.

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people
who are likely to purchase online
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been rising recently compare with what used to be.
However
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there are both
pros
and cons
can
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be seen in
retailer
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retailers
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and big companies which experienced more online deals, and
people
who
are tend
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to purchase their
requirement
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requirements
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online, especially young
people
who define
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of online
buyer
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. In
this
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I am going to explain numbers of advantages and disadvantages. Let’s begin by looking at
the
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some business owners
who
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they
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are going to launch their business, but have been deprived of enough money sources so that online
sale
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been
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seen as one of the main
pros
from
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of independent stores
while
they can
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snap the bargain, On the other hands from the sight of high street name brand, having been known by numerous of
people
, significant improvement
have
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been brought about by
this
method being done by
people
, what I mean by
this
is that
people
can order their requirements just by surfing in the Internet with no need any physical stores, so they can save their time and run away from traffic, there are
pros
for two side of dealing .
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addition
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internet helps both little shops and vast
one
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for having more sell, no matter which products have been sold and
people
bring high
beneficial
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from that Turning to the other side of
argument
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the argument
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, sellers must tackle with
large
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a large
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number of
people
who have just virtual identification.
Let
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use some
buyer
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buyers
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for instance
, who return
their
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product which had
sent
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to them
as a result
of some terrifying matter or maybe some unavoidable one, like
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between the exact color or style that had shown in
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and reality so that online shops must undertake
such
issues and be ready for satisfying vast range of
people
without seeing them. The bigger store, the bigger problem. What I mean by
that is
about
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this
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fact that they can destroy their brand
by
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just
little
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mistake.
On the other
hand
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people
must trust
on
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some seller pages and send money to them before they receive their orders so it is
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full
people
may
lost
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their money. Totally both buyers and sellers should consider all aspects when they put
step
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in
this
method. Companies and customers need to weigh up all
pros
and cons of online
deal
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. I believe eventually the benefits in terms of having social currency for companies and easy buying without any
labor
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or stuck up in populous and more chance for finding some goods which are on sale
while
have
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entitlement, outweigh any negative. For supporting
this
clause, there are numerous shops that say: Had we invested in social media
for
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attract customers, we would have improved better.
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