Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar do you agree or disagree?

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one of the most favourable meals among

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it has been proven that they are responsible for many diseases, still there are discussions on how to reduce their consumption, like by making high-sugar edibles

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too expensive to purchase.

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essay. Undoubtedly, overusing sugar has to be banned

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its detrimental effects on the health of consumers.

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with, as it has been proven by scientific experiments taking a high level of carbohydrates like glucose or sugar could lead to many physical diseases.

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, the number of newly diagnosed diabetes mellitus is increasing by an enormous number annually. The main reason for

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is an incremental level of glucose intake utilized by

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, many nutritionists suggest glucose could be an addictive substance if used regularly in a high dosage.

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, it may cause both physical and mental dependency which could be aggravated by time. Admittedly, one significant way to deal with these problems

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is to sanction an extra tax on enriched carbohydrate products.

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would make it hard for shoppers to afford

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meals and drinks and

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in some cases might shift their attitude toward healthy and less sweet ones.

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was used to decrease the number of smokers among the youth in Young New Zealanders. It was successful and led to a significant reduction in cigarette abuse

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its high price. In conclusion, taking high-sugar products has

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side effects on human health.

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the increase in the price of these sorts of food and drinks, their consumption could become more limited and less favourable.