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It is better for people to be unemployed than being employed with a job they do not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #job
Since unemployment is burgeoning because of an inaccurate working environment. Some people argue that leaving a job is a better option rather than working in an inappropriate environment. I completely agree with the statement because if a person is not satisfied with the job it gives them mental stress which leads to many health-related issues. There are a plethora of reasons why people should not continue the work that does not enjoy. the first and foremost reason is it gives them mental stress. To elaborate, if an individual is not content with the job it gives them anxiety
as well as
 harmful to the body
also
.
As a result
, it impacts their
overall
 performance at work.
For example
, employees who do not get enough support from their colleagues and their employers are more likely to have mental stress
as well as
 their performance at their work is not good.
Moreover
, health is more important
while
 working. good well-being in results better results.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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