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Some people believe that it is a good idea that people older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do . Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #idea #work
Currently, the problem of some
people
prefer
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 older
people
 they can go
work
 until when they can not do it anymore .
For
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Me
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me
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apply
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, I will agree with that if they can
flexible
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be flexible
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with everthing
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everthing
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everything
. First , they need to know about between
of
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apply
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money and health , some
people
thye
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they
 want to earn a lot of money and don'
t
 care about their health I'm not
support
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a support
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 for
kind
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 of person like that when they
old
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are old
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 but still want to
work
. Everyone can
work
 until when they feel can not do anymore but don'
t
 do something like make yourself feel bad . Because
go
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 to
work
 that's way can make old
people
 don'
t
 feel alone
also
 and they can make
friend
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friends
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,
communicate
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and communicate
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 with
people
 same the age . They can understand each other and can share something in
the
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their
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 life with someone.
Addition
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, I recommend for older
people
 go
work
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to work
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 because
i
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I
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 saw so many old
people
 stay at home too long and don'
t
 have
people
 to talk they get
depression
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depressed
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 and feel
like
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apply
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too bad . Avoid older
work
 too much so I think the companies if want to
hiring
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some one
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someone
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 need to check their body heath first because
i
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I
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 don'
t
 want to like some
people
 their health is not good but
stil
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still
 want to earn money.
Summary
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In summary
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, I recommend for old
people
 go to
work
 but not
work
to
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too
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 hard and need to
becareful
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be careful
for
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of
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 them self.
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