Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species . Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem . Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation . Discuss both views and give your opinion .

It is a well-known fact, that our own behaviour
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an enormous influence
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our planet, and
therefore
, many species and plants are in grave danger. Some people assume that there is nothing that can be done at
this
point
,
while
others think that if we act now, we can still create a change. In
this
essay, I will discuss both of these views, and I will explain why I believe there is still hope for our world if certain measures will be taken. On one hand, many people believe that we have reached the no-return
point
. Our human footprint cause
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environmental damage. Factories discharge their waste straight into the water we drink, but even on the individual level, we have no respect for the earth and we treat it very badly, throwing waste everywhere, leaving destruction after us everywhere, that's why at
this
point
, it is very difficult to change that global behaviour, but even if we will manage to do so, we can't change the destructive effect we caused in our own actions.
On the other hand
, Other people believe, and I strongly agree with them, that even the smallest step, can create a huge difference, and that there are some solutions that we can embrace
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a universal level but
also
on a personal level.
First,
if governments will unite and decide to fight together for
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, they can increase taxes and fines on petrol and diesel cars, but
also
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greener
more
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cleaner public transportation,
this
step by itself, will be able to decrease air pollution rapidly and
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globally
.
In addition
, if each of us will take care of our surroundings, and recycle, the impact will be so highly effective, and within a couple of
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we will see a great improvement. In conclusion, our
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environmental situation had deteriorate increasingly in the past years. it seems that
this
situation had reached a new breaking
point
that some believe it will be extremely hard to turn back from.
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,
that is
why I believe it is so important to take immediate steps and make an effort to cure our planet, and
moreover
, if we won't act soon enough,
then
the results may be dangerous to everyone.
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