Some people are fond of buying new gadgets phones or laptop is this a good or bad thing discuss your opinion

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I totally think it's not bad but not good too.
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people
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can contact with someone from another country by
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. I think it is a good thing for
people
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a phone
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phone
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phones
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laptop
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everything for
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let
people
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follow some new things on the
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, I'm not really
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people
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always buy a new
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or laptop just
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waste
money but buy it for nothing . If they buy it for work or study I strongly will
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let them buy it. But just like some
people
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just want to buy it for
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want
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bad thing for them.
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, I used to be like that before I always want to buy
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iphone
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iPhone
phone
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iPhone
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I just want to show up with my friend . In my opinion , you can buy whatever you like because
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your money
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mine but I just want to let you know
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phone
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phones
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laptop
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their
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something else. Don't too much abuse them . In
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difference
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thinking but just
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fond
  • Gadgets
  • Phones
  • Laptop
  • Advantages
  • Latest technology
  • Features
  • Improved performance
  • Functionality
  • Enhanced productivity
  • Convenience
  • Access
  • Innovative applications
  • User experience
  • Disadvantages
  • High cost
  • Financial implications
  • Environmental impact
  • E-waste
  • Rapid obsolescence
  • Dependency
  • Social disconnection
  • Addiction
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