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People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the direction of going abroad for higher education has been increasingly popular. Some people believe that the nation will achieve a lot If its learner goes to another nation to pursue degrees. I totally disagree with the notion and in the following paragraphs,I will support my opinion with relevant examples.
To begin
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this
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 tendency of migrating to other nations to pursue study can weaken the
economy
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 of the country. A single student takes a large portion of the
economy
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 in the form of college fees, living expenses in another country and so on.
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,
according to
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 a recent survey, the constant migration of Indian students to Canada makes the Indian
economy
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 weak day by day.
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, a learner's concentration on the study could be affected because of
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 trend. Students can feel isolated, homesick and emotionally weak living far away from their
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 and loved ones.
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, some nations have very high living expenses and it will force students to find jobs to pay bills. So, a large number of distractions are involved in studying away from
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home.
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, studying away from a boundary brings a bundle of opportunities for a student. They can get a chance of learning from the world's best teachers and can make a bright future.
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, the USA has the world's top universities and colleges which attract bright recruitment from around the world every year.
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, the movement of leaving a country to study is not beneficial because of its effect on the
economy
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 and emotions of children
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 it broadens the opportunities as well. Personally, I believe the learners should stay in their own place and gain knowledge within their own boundaries of comfort.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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