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Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do • give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

#friend #country #work #months #•recommend #city #•suggest #jobs #friends #locals
Dear Megi, How are you?I hope to have
nice
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 day.I a
writting
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writing
this
 letter because Kejdi
explain
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 me that you came to live in my country for 6 months.When you came here I can help you
for
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 everything.
Firstly
,I suggest you can live in
Tirana
 because I live here.
Tirana
 is a big city and you can go everywhere.
Tirana
 offers you more opportunities to do everything.
Tirana
have
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 a
lot
 of shops,
have
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 restaurant,
lake
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a lake
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 and
opera
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.I can help you to find a house but you can leave
with
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 me because I leave alone.
Therefore
,some of my friends can help you to get a good job.You can work
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a menager
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menager
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manager
 in the restaurant,you can work taxi,you can work in the hotel reception and some other job.
Tirana
 can
offers
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 you a
lot
 of jobs.
Moreover
,the people are friendly and quiet.They can help you
for
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 everything.They can learn you about the job.They can suggest you a
lot
 of places when can visit. I am
waiting
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 you to
came
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in
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 my country because we can have a
lot
 of fun. Best wishes, Xhesjana Mydini
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