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Some people believe that the climate of a country has the greatest influence on its culture (e.g. food, arts, music, clothing). Others believe that there are more important influences. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There are various speculations on different cultural beliefs in many parts of the world.
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 other
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 believe it is
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because
 of the music, outfits or the kind of
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.
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 others think things
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 as political history
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 to the lifestyles.
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 essay will explore both sides and explain why I think both cases
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 an impact on
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 of life. On the
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 hand, it is understandable that different traditions engage in celebrations of different cuisines
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 wearing special gowns. Without the
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, residents can not participate in
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 activities.
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, in Asian ,cultures
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 is considered something important that they have introduced festivals for eating different dishes.
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 makes
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 very happy and always look forward to the celebrations.
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, some countries have weather conditions for the citizens to celebrate different kinds of arts.
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 example is that of Zambia, every summer they celebrate the migration from
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 place to another.
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 is because of climate
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,
people
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 do not have enough water in their residential areas.
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,
food
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 and weather conditions are known influencers of some beliefs.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe there is more to traditions than foodstuff and weather. The history of the nation plays an important role in cultural mentality. To illustrate, if the
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 was under British ruling
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 got its independence, citizens of that country celebrate their independence from slavery.
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 is
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 way that the community preserve their belonging from generation to generation.
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, the independence of what
people
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 can do in their own nation impacts the values and ideology that they hold. I strongly believe that in both
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cases, everything thing influences society. In conclusion, some think that only
food
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, arts, and clothing
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 the country's traditions. I think other things
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 as the history of the countries
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 play an important part in determining the customs of a country.

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