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Some people believe that the climate of a country has the greatest influence on its culture (e.g. food, arts, music, clothing). Others believe that there are more important influences. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There are various speculations on different cultural beliefs in many parts of the world.
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 other
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 believe it is
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because
 of the music, outfits or the kind of
food
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.
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 others think things
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 as political history
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 to the lifestyles.
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 essay will explore both sides and explain why I think both cases
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 an impact on
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 of life. On the
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 hand, it is understandable that different traditions engage in celebrations of different cuisines
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 wearing special gowns. Without the
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, residents can not participate in
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 activities.
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, in Asian ,cultures
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 is considered something important that they have introduced festivals for eating different dishes.
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 makes
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 very happy and always look forward to the celebrations.
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, some countries have weather conditions for the citizens to celebrate different kinds of arts.
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 example is that of Zambia, every summer they celebrate the migration from
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 place to another.
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 is because of climate
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,
people
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 do not have enough water in their residential areas.
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,
food
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 and weather conditions are known influencers of some beliefs.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe there is more to traditions than foodstuff and weather. The history of the nation plays an important role in cultural mentality. To illustrate, if the
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 was under British ruling
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 got its independence, citizens of that country celebrate their independence from slavery.
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 is
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 way that the community preserve their belonging from generation to generation.
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, the independence of what
people
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 can do in their own nation impacts the values and ideology that they hold. I strongly believe that in both
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cases, everything thing influences society. In conclusion, some think that only
food
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, arts, and clothing
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 the country's traditions. I think other things
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 as the history of the countries
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 play an important part in determining the customs of a country.

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