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Some people think public library is necessary, however, others believe that the public library is useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.

#people #library
In today's culture
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the
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__,disputes are in plentiful supply.___is useful for
people
 in our contemporary world.Opinions about the__are varied these days
due to
 the increasing demand.The question of whether the__is important in our lives worries us.
Although
 most
people
 think about it in their
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.Personally,l think it is their choice whether the__is harmful or beneficial to
people
. On the
one
 hand,there is a clear argument that if you want to do well in__,you have to work hard.
One
 of the main reasons for
this
 is the unsustainability of the__.
This
 means that
people
 are hesitant. Another reason is that it is entirely up to
people
 to do what they want.
This
 is
one
 of the factors determining
this
.
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 the other hand,l agree with
this
 idea because it is interesting
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 me.That first step to be taken would be to__.To alleviate the situation,
people
 should__.l believe
that__would
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that would
 certainly ameliorate the situation.
This
 is because__.
Secondly
, we will talk about the__.
Finally
,we will focus
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_.
To sum
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 briefly,all things considered: it is my opinion__has many
significiant
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significant
 negative(
pozitive
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positive
) effects on society.__
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 cannot be denied that
this
 issue deserves more attention as it has
such
 serious effects on society.
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