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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. • Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn. • Explain how your friend could lear this sport. • Suggest that you both learn this sport together. Write at least 150 words

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Dear Alex, Hopefully, you and your family are doing well. My apologies for not being in touch, but I am making up for it via
this
 letter; as least I hope so. Regarding your new sport, I would recommend trying
yoga
. In my opinion,
this
 type of sport is more suitable for you, considering your sedentary job and constant excitement.
Yoga
 can help you reduce stress levels and relax your body, making it a perfect fit for you
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Furthermore
, a new
yoga
center
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 for adults has opened in our city, conveniently located near our
neighborhood
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, just a 20-minute walk away. I have already purchased a subscription, and I can invite one of my friends to join us for a trial lesson. As for the
yoga
 learning is concerned, the
center
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 offers various options that we can explore together.
Additionally
, there is a
yoga
 club in the park near our house, where we can
also
 participate. I am hoping
this
 letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon! Best regards, Anna
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