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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how gold
sales
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 in Dubai changed over a period of 12 months.
Overall
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, gold
sales
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 in Dubai remained relatively unchanged
at the end
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 of 2002 despite violent fluctuations throughout the year.
Besides
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, they were at their highest in March
while
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 the weakest
sales
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 figures could be observed in July and September. In the first month of 2002, they stood at 200
million
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dirhams
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 and rose slightly to reach about 225
million
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 in February.
This
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 was followed by another increase,
although
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 much steeper, in March when
sales
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 were almost 125
million
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dirhams
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 higher than in February.
However
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,
this
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 upward trend was suddenly broken and
sales
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 plummeted dramatically over the next 4 months to reach a little over 100
million
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dirhams
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 in July. August
sales
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 saw a significant rise back to January levels as figures nearly doubled, but they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. There was a small increase of about 100
million
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dirhams
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 in October, after which the figure levelled off and remained relatively static over the
last
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 two months of 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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