"In recent years, good
parents
have
attactedCorrect your spelling
attached
attracted
attacked
the (general publics attention)/the attention of the general public.
While
some people believe that would be a good
idea
for
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to teach every/each young
person
how to be a good
parent
. After (
a Correct article usage
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throughCorrect your spelling
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)/careful consideration, for my part, I partly agree with
this
idea
.
This
essay will give reasons to support both views.
On the one hand, there are some reasons to support the
idea
that it would be
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/a great
idea
for the
school
to teach every/
each Correct determiner usage
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young
person
/student how to be a good
parent
.
Firstly
, a good
parent
affects
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a Correct article usage
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(
children
)/child now and in the future, (a good
parent
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that
parent
takeChange the verb form
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care of
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childrenAdd the comma(s)
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, they know how to love them and teach for them
children
how to become
a Correct article usage
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good
person
in
themChange the pronoun
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house and in the social),/a good
parent
knows how to love them and teach their
children
how to become a good
person
in their home and in society. But in reality, some
parentFix the agreement mistake
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do not know how to do that, some young people get married when they are so (younger)/ young, before getting married they just study,
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the game, hang out... they do not care how to (the) quality family so after getting married they have many mistakes in (them)/their family. so/
Thus
,
that is
why I think the
school
teaches them how to be a good
parent
like/as a main subject.
Secondly
, if the
school
can teach them when they are students, they will become (
toReplace the word
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) a good
personFix the agreement mistake
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first and
then
they will understand that
themChange the pronoun
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/their
parents
are good
parents
and they will show love back to (them)/their
parentFix the agreement mistake
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.
BesideReplace the word
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that, they will have better action and help (
themCorrect pronoun usage
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)
parent
a lot/much after finishing/completing homework
instead
of (
theyCorrect pronoun usage
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) playing games or (
toChange preposition
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) doing
some thingCorrect your spelling
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(
makeCorrect pronoun usage
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themCorrect pronoun usage
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)
parents
worry about.
On the other hand
, there are some (
)/arguments
the statement/reporting that would be a good
idea
for the
school
to teach every young
person
/youth how to be a good
parent
. On top of that/
this
young
person
told/said that they can learn how to be a good
parent
when they get married and have
babyAdd an article
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already,
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not need to worry about that now because (them onus now are)they think that they have to learn how to studying/study well and get a great job to earn a lot of money in the future.
All in all, from what has been discussed above. it would be very difficult to evaluate whether
this
idea
is reasonable or not, and it is still a controversial issue. In my opinion, I am in favour of both sides of
this
idea
. The government should have
further
consideration on
this
issue.
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