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In the future al the cars. Buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles wil be passenger

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Introduction
In the
future
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 many
transport
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, public
transport
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 and trucks are driven by
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the auto
an auto
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auto pilot
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autopilot
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. The only
people
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 going to
qnywhere
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anywhere
 inside these
transport
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 will be
passenger
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passengers
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. And it helps
to
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apply
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people
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 because
people
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 don't spend energy to control
transport
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.
Body paragraph 1
On the one
hand
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 it is
usefull
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useful
to
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for
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people
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that
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is
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are
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decrised
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decreased
 to get on the radar. Since there are many types of radar and
sat
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set
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 up several
camera
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cameras
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to
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on
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the highway
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highway
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highways
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.
In
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addition
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 these types of
transport
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 protect
any
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against any
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 problem or crash with other
transport
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. Because
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this
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these
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 kinds of
vhicles
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vehicles
 are
coverd
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covered
 with
protector
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protective
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 things. For
instence
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instance
people
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 can control
a long
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along
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 with the
auto pilot
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autopilot
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 on the way.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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 unexpected
lost
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loss
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 of control over the
auto pilot
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autopilot
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. Because all
of
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apply
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things
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the things
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 are
make
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made
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 by hand and they are not perfect which is made by
people
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.
Conclusion
In
short
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 all of
transport
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 and truck is used to need of
people
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. Since
such
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a
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transport
a means of transport
a mode of transport
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transport
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 are made to do
people
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's mainly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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