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You should spend about 40 minutes on this question. Many people today are worried about 'cybercrime' such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does 'cybercrime cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #people #cybercrime #identity #theft #businesses
Nowadays crimes committed
in
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Internet
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the Internet
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 are becoming a significant
problem
 among all
the
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web users. These offences are connected with stolen personalities and
accesses
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access
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 to people’s personal data.
This
 essay will suggest that the biggest
problem
 connected to cybercrime is
a
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 spread of disinformation and
then
 submit the usage of double authentication as the most viable solution. The foremost
problem
 caused by
Internet
 thefts is misinformation posted on stolen accounts. Millions of people, including presidents and prime ministers of different countries use
Internet
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the Internet
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 and social media websites to share important
information
 with subscribers, but after successful hacker attacks criminals may start posting frightening and unbelievable facts. These data appear to be true for many users, as they consider those
Internet
 sources or social media profiles as reliable ones.
As a result
, believing in
such
 kinds of
information
 may spread panic within society and mistrust
to
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 governments and
Internet
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the Internet
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 in general.
For instance
, in 2020 during
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic, on
Twitter
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the Twitter
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 page of
Minister
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the Minister
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 of
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,health
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health
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information
 about massive
evacuation
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evacuations
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 appeared. It caused huge panic among all Russian citizens and many of them started buying plane tickets to different countries. The
information
 was fake as his Twitter profile was hacked, but it took a week to convince people that there is no evacuation. A possible solution to
this
problem
 is
usage
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 of double authentication on all the websites where your personality can be stolen. Nobody will be able to access your personal datum and post something from your face if you will need to insert a unique code sent to your mobile phone every time you
log-in
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. The profile may be
also
 blocked by a user if he or she receives a code which he or she is not applying for. In the USA
this
 double-check system prevented ten attacks on Donald Trump’s Twitter account.
To conclude
, widespread
of
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misinformation caused by identity thefts is an enormous
problem
 in
the
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modern society and a relevant solution to
this
 issue is
a
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 usage of double personality-check systems to prevent attacks
of
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 hackers.
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