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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given chart illustrates four European Countries spent on six consumers of goods.
Overall
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, Britain spent much on photographic
film
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,
toys
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,
CDs
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, and
perfumes
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. France spent more on photographic
film
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 and
CDs
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. Italians spent more on
toys
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 and Germany on
perfumes
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,
tennis
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racquets
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, and
perfumes
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.
To begin
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 with, the highest spending for British people is on photographic
film
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 at 170 and the lowest is on
tennis
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racquets
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 and personal
stereos
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 at 155. Britain spent 167 on
toys
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. Next is for
CDs
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 at 165 and
perfumes
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 at 160. France spent 165 on Photographic
film
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 which is the highest and
tennis
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racquets
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 be the most unpopular one at 145. The second rank is
Cds
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 at 157. Next is
Toys
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 at 156. The perfume and personal
stereos
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 on the same amount at 147.
Next,
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the highest spending in Italy is on
Toys
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 at 155 and 150 for
CDs
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 and Personal
stereos
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. The same proportion happens to photographic
film
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,
perfumes
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, and
tennis
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racquets
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 at 155.
Finally
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, German people spend on photographic
film
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,
perfumes
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, and
tennis
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racquets
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 147. The second rank is
perfumes
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 and
tennis
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racquets
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 at 150. Next is personal
stereos
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 at 146 and spend less on
toys
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 and
CDs
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words film, toys, cds, perfumes, tennis, racquets, stereos with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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