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some people say material possessions are very useful in bringing us happpiness, but others argue that they are useless in terms of providing happiness. discuss both views and give your opinion and reasons

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There are a considerable amount of people who opine that having
money
 makes them happy,
while
 others claim that
money
 does not play a role in it. It seems to me that, capital can bring a multitude number of positive emotions but true happiness. In
this
 essay, we will take a look at both sides of the argument.
Further
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 and more important advantage of the
money
, it provides more opportunity for an individual's life.
For instance
, if one wants to study at university,
then
to
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apply
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one will be given plenty of variants where
person
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a person
the person
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 can obtain any knowledge at any desired place.
Additionally
,
money
 equals
to
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comfort. To illustrate, rich people do not have to commute
in
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to
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 the city by bus, they have
own
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their own
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 fancy cars where all the conveniences are provided,
such
 as air conditioning and more space and so on.
On the other hand
, when it comes to the statement like love, which gives to
person
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a person
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feeling
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a feeling
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 of joy,
money
 has no power. The main reason for that,
we
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is we
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 cannot buy one's true
feeling
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feelings
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.
To conclude
 from the aforementioned arguments, I am still convinced that real happiness is being surrounded by
caring
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a caring
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, loving, and supportive environment better than any comfort which we can afford with the help of
money
.
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