Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graphs provide information on
deaths
caused by six kinds of diseases in
Someland
in 1990 and the money spent on medical
research
. Clearly,
TB
is the most detrimental
disease
of all ailments.
Also
, the amount of funding on researching seems to be relative to the number of death in the country.
To begin
with,
TB
caused
deaths
three times more than the other diseases did. About 1.75
million
people
who live in
Someland
died
by
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TB
,
while
less than 0.5
million
people
passed away
due to
each
disease
. Diarrhoea comes second with 0.5
million
deaths
and Malaria killed the public in the country about 0.4
million
people
. Leprosy is the least harmful
disease
for
people
in
Someland
with about one hundred thousand
deaths
and AIDS follows with 0.25
million
deaths
. When it comes to
research
, it seems to be effective for particular illnesses.
Deaths
by AIDS seem to be suppressed at a lower rate
due to
the most massive funding of all six sicknesses, which is about 1.75
million
.
On the contrary
,
TB
hadn’t been investigated yet so it resulted in enormous
deaths
.
Although
some diseases may not show a relation that the amount of R&D on each
disease
like Diarrhoea and Malaria, it seems to be possible to reduce the number of
deaths
if more money is spent on
a
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research
. In brief,
although
TB
is the most dangerous illness for
people
in
Someland
in 1990, medical
research
seems to be effective to diminish
deaths
from these sicknesses like AIDS.
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