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Some people believe that education is increasing nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Some humans lean on that curriculum growth on the ground. I agree with the statement that
education
 development.
This
 essay shall analyse what
this
 is increase and
also
 suggest some measures. In the first
place
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 humans limit social media so
quality
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the quality
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 of
education
come
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 down increasingly. The government is exertion
this
 situation beet
this
is fail
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.
Education
 is a weapon to improve
one
's
life
 . It is probably the most important tool to change
one
's
life
 .
Education
 for a child begins at home. It is a lifelong process that ends with death . Sadly nowadays some parents careless upbringing for children. They are busy on social media all day and don't interest their children
what
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 practice. After
all
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education
 certainly determines the quality of an individual's
life
 .
Education
 improves
one
's knowledge, skills and development the personality and attitude.
Education
 makes an individual a better
user
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 of technology .
Education
 certainly provides the technical skills necessary for using technology.
Hence
 without
education
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 it would probably be difficult to handle modern machines. That's why the government want to increase
of
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education
 on the ground.
Education
is honestly learn
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is honestly learned
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by
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through
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 social networks because social networks
stylised
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 by
education
. There are a lot of
e -book
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, e-business and past masters.
This
through
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is through
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 that you may
schooling
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school
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 academic.
To conclude
education
 in our piece of
life
.
One
 piece of
education
 injection on social media. To realise
such
 efforts, not only the government, but every individual should contribute.
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