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The government should task unhealthy food so that more people will be encouraged to eat healthy food Do you agree or disagree?

#government #food #people
In today's culture
about
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the
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__,disputes are in plentiful supply.__is useful for
nation
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 in our contemporary world.Opinions about the___are varied these days
due to
 the increasing demand.The question of whether the__is important in our lives worries us.
Although
 most
folk
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 think about it in their favour.Personally,l think it is their choice whether the__is harmful or beneficial to
crowd
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. On the one hand,there is a clear argument that if you want to do well in__,you have to work hard. One of the main reasons for
this
 is the unsustainability of the__.
This
 means that
community
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 are hesitant. Another reason is that it is entirely up to people to do what they want.
This
 is only of the factors determining
this
.
On the other hand
,l agree with
this
 idea because it is interesting to me.That first step to be taken would be to__.To alleviate the situation,people should__.l believe
that__would
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that would
 certainly ameliorate the situation.
This
 is because___.
Secondly
,we will talk about the__.
Finally
,we will focus
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_. To sum,up briefly,all things considered:it is my opinion__as many
significiant
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significant
 negative(
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positive
) effects on society. ___
ıt
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 cannot be denied that
this
 issue deserves more attention as it has
such
 serious effects on society.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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