Some people believe that watching TV bad for children while others claim it has positive effects for children as they grow up. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Nowadays
children
are very modern and they use phone
computer
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and watch
tv
.Some people think that
this
is not good
while
other people believe it has positive effects. In my opinion these views , there are some negative and positive impacts. On the one hand , there are several reasons why watching
TV
is beneficial for
children
.
Firstly
video is informative and learning everything. It serves as
portal
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of information
can
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that can
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help more creative and familiar with the world.
Secondly
, television can make studying enjoyable it has educational
cartoons
children
love to watch . Most teachers prefer to have
computer
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a computer
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set in their classroom to help them watch
tv
programs
are
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that are
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educational for
children
.
On the other hand
, there are
also
a number of shows
can
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that can
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have negative impacts on
the
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psychology. There are a lot of programs about violence ,
drugs
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and drugs
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and these can be unsuitable for kids.
Although
, watching
cartoons
have beneficial and educational effects for
children
more
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watching
cartoons
rather than reading books,
doing
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or doing
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homework.
In addition
,
more
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the more
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children
watch
tv
, the less they exercise. In conclusion,
although
watching
cartoons
has good effects on
children
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teach
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.
However
, I believe
tv
is more detrimental
for
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children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary behavior
  • unrealistic perceptions
  • creative pursuits
  • social development
  • emotional development
  • constructive content
  • screen time
  • parental guidance
  • critical thinking
  • active learning
  • age-appropriate
  • media literacy
  • family bonding
  • moderation
  • perceive
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