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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data about
average
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the average
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 weekly income spending by
families
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 in eight different categories in one particular country in two years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of
families
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in
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on
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 food showed
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a dramaticaly
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dramaticaly
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dramatically
 decline over the given period,
whereas
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 the spending
in
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on
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 accommodation and leisure showed
significantly
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a significantly
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 increased. Looking at the chart in more detail, we can see
families
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 became less
intereseted
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interested
 in spending their money
in
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on
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 food in 1968 the proportion was 35% and in 2018 decreased to half
approxmiately
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approximately
to
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17%.
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, the percentage of households who spent money
in
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on
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 housing and leisure
is
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climbed from 10 to 18 % and 9 to 22%, respectively over two years given.
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, the spending
in
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on
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 transport experience went up
in
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from almost 8 to 14%. The proportion
in
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of
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household
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households
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 who spent their money
in
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on
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 goods is constant during the given period was about 7 %.
The fuel
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Fuel
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 and power received
lowest
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the lowest
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 spending from
families
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 during over two years and showed
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 went down from nearly 6 to 4 %.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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