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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and cociety. To what extent do you agree?

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Today is an era of modernization. When it comes to social
media
, there are different viewpoints where
one
 group is seen validating
this
 trend and another, descends the same and considers it as fallacious to both individuals and civilization. In
this
 essay, I will be opposing the latter group of
people
 as I believe that it's not social
media
that is
 harming
people
 and society, it's their own habits that do so.
To begin
 with, social
media
 has a huge impact on almost everybody's life today. There's no
one
, who hasn'
t
 used any of these
sites
. Even children
,
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 are familiar with these
sites
 like Facebook, TikTok, Instagram etc. Their popularity is getting outnumbered now. It is, actually, a great way to be in touch with our near and dear ones which is usually difficult in day-to-day routine. With the rapid growth in technology, everyone are having mobile phones and access to social
media
 is easy.
Secondly
, there's a trend where
people
 who don'
t
 have an account on social
media
 are considered outdated or old-fashioned and they feel cut off from their friends or family members.
Due to
 the fact, no
one
 wants to be behind, they start creating accounts on these
sites
,
also
 because of fear of being called old fashioned if they don'
t
. Another advantage of using social
media
 is awareness of surroundings. As there are a number of businesses now that run only on social
media
. If you are not on social
media
 you cannot have knowledge of those businesses. These
sites
 are not just limited to chatting or sharing photos, it's scope is far beyond just chatting and sharing photos.
For instance
, during COVID-19 complete shutdown, many businesses exclusively run on Whatsapp, where
people
 ordered their products through these
sites
. Even Whatsapp Business is now launched to tackle the business needs of entrepreneurs.
Although
 it has a number of advantages, there can be some drawbacks to using social
media
 apps which some
people
 considered having an adverse impact on
community
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 as a whole. There can be some notorious
people
 living in
this
 world too, that spread fake and malicious content on these
sites
.
One
 should be careful enough to find the accuracy of the content. Even I believe, governments should build some tribunals that act as a watchdog and refine
this
 type of content on social
media
.
Overall
, I would say being on social
media
 is today's requirement and you can'
t
 deny
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • consequences
  • detract
  • alienation
  • isolation
  • overwhelming
  • vulnerable
  • sustainability
  • inadvertently
  • pervasive
  • exacerbate
  • undermine
  • curated
  • misleading
  • manipulation
  • gullible
  • fragmentation
  • repercussions
  • exploitation
  • impersonal
  • unproductive
  • cyber harassment
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