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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Wht might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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People
 in some countries believe that it is essential for
people
 to own a
home
 rather than renting one.Living in a self-owned
home
 gives a feeling of comfort,stability and security.From my point of view whether it is a positive or negative
situation
 depends on many factors. When owning a
home
 you have the ability to hold full ownership and disposition of the house.
Therefore
 you can easily build or decorate the house without asking anyone else.
People
 owning a
home
dont
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don't
 have to worry about the landlord nor do they have to pay a monthly rent.It
help
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people
 to save a large amount of money . All in
all
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i
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I
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 am strongly convinced that owning a
home
 is a positive or a negative
situation
 is quite subjective.Since it depends on the condition of
people
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the people
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.For
people
 who are capable of buying a house,their
home
 is their property and owning a
home
 is a positive
situation
 for them.
However
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 not everyone can buy a
home
 If they were intolerant
theu
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they
 would have to borrow money for a very long time.
In
addition
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 there will be so many
fee
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 that they have to incur In conclusion ,from my point of view owning a
home
 can be a
pleusurable
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pleasurable
 experience if done without
budget
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a budget
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.
On the
contrary
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 it can be turned into a negative
situation
 when
people
 buy a
home
 by the way of borrowing money.
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