The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

Having a single
sources
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of
incomes
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is considered
as
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a traditional way of living.
People
are more likely to
earns
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more
money
from different side hustles which
considered
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as the
reasons
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reason
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why
education
need
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to become part of
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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.
This
essay will
elaborates
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several
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reasons why
this
view is agreeable.
To begin
with, earning
money
from multiple sources has many benefits. The first one is coming from how an individual will learn to maximize their time and be open to a variety of knowledge.
This
situation will make
people
more adaptable and not really depend on a single job to sustain their living.
Secondly
,
this
lifestyle will benefit an individual to earn more
money
. As a matter of fact, the cost of living is skyrocketing over the
last
ten years. Unfortunately,
this
issue will
also
followed
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by stagnant salaries.
Furthermore
,
people
who
work
on
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multiple sectors are more likely to find their passion as they will expose to different activities. At the same time, I believe,
people
should continue their
education
throughout their life.
This
is because, to be able to
work
in different
sector
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, the strong
valid
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of
education
will make the process enjoyable. Take the changes of
work
from anywhere trend as
valid
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example. There are several institutions that offer additional knowledge,
such
as data
analysist
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analysis
analyst
, internet marketing, and freelance
writer
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. The mentioned
education
will allow
people
to
work
from anywhere, as long as they have
the
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personal computer and internet connection.
Moreover
, it is possible for
people
who
has
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the
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strong background of knowledge to earn
money
from different sources. Summing up, the style of working for different jobs
have
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become part of
lifestyle
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among
today
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generation. And I
belive
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, to achieve that, the willingness to continue their
education
should become the priority.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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