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✅️ Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing.To what extant do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #areas #towns #cities
🔅The utilization of the open
ares
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areas
area
 for planting or housing disputable issue.In my
opinion
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 I agree that
build
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 more gardens and woodland.
This
 is
vital
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 role for
humans
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life
.I shall explain my point of view and give supporting reasons. 🌳
To begin
 with, more
plants
 should be planted everywhere.Variety
plants
 assist
to
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apply
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urban and towns
for
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to
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 keep clean air.There is
not
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no
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 pollution
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in people
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people
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people's
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 lifestyle.
For example
, extra
trees
 shade
are
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is
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 generated when more
trees
 are planted in open areas,which not only decorate
for
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road
,
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 but
also
 helps to save normal temperature .
Also
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 it
provide
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 that children do not play in the sun. 🪴
Additionally
,
trees
 produce more oxygen from themselves.They can help to cool down the streets.
Trees
 that are most planted as homes for birds, squirrels and bees are oak sycamore. 🌴
In addition
, nowadays, one of the biggest world problems
associated
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the
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 environment, so more
plants
 are important several urban
to
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apply
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. 🍀
However
, planting more
trees
 in urban areas brings nature into cities which is
bebeficial
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beneficial
 to people without access to
rural
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the rural
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 zone. 🌻
On the other hand
 ,
plants
are assemble
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 as a part of individual
life
.
Life
 can not be formed without them.
Therefore
, we need to preserve cultivated
plants
.
Trees
 which are a part of nature should be cultivated everywhere in the world. 🌵
To sum up
,
due to
 mass urbanization the need for
trees
 and gardens
have
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arastically
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dramatically
 increased to improve the quality of
life
 in overcrowded cities.
Moreover
,
trees
 and gardens are natural
reserve
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 that can help protect against various
man -made
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man-made
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 disasters.
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