Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of the school programs (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

A number of people advocate that schoolchildren should be taught unpaid

community

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service included in their

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opinion and I believe that intending students to participate in charity activities, ameliorate the

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and help others has

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impact on their social and psychological development. First of all, the study of

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services at schools may play a crucial role in

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the formation

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of a person as a good member of society since children learn how to help others without any expectation of gratitude.

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, proper traits

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as selflessness, kindness and sympathy can be developed in

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behavior

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thanks to being enrolled in

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courses.

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,

community

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services can help to teach students

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they would know the importance of problems surrounding them

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so that their

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would

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. Singapore is a good example of applying

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tactic: free voluntary service is a compulsory course at all schools in order to increase awareness regarding social problems.

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, taking actions forward charitable actions may be beneficial for schoolchildren’s mental health. Being charitable can help improve the mood and make people feel more optimistic.

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study

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featured in

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“Prevention”, individuals who do not take the time to do

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service face a 30% greater risk of death following a stressful life event than someone who helps others. So, when children’s emotional state improves, it can help strengthen

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system and health.

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, I support the idea of adding

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services to the curriculum plans of schools as it not only contributes to children’s

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and

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development but

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improves their physical and psychological state .