Nowadays ,more and more people are reading books and news on the internet. Is this a positve or negative development.

these days quiet people
used
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to reading
books
, newspapers and
news
on
the
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website
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.And it
is influence
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their health. Almost everyone now uses social media and
that is
why they are well-known costless
books
and
news
on the
internet
.For
this
,reason they don`t use simple paper
books
and newspapers . On the
,
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hand it is true because they do not need to spend money . It is better to read free
books
on the
Internet
than to buy
books
with your money.And they can spend other things there in cash.For ,example almost all the old
family
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love reading a newspaper in the morning and they have got mobile phones and the
Internet
.
That is
why
either
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they do not need ordinary paper for reading
books
or newspapers , On the other ,hand it is brought to a negative effect on their health . Especially to young
children
and the old community.Young
children
`s parents would rather read something on the
internet
and have their
children
learn it .And
then
children
spent
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time on the
internet
to read free
books
and
news
.
children
of the world country already used to it but Uzbek people are now studying it .If
children
don`t know
amount
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read something on the
internet
, definitely can
bring
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a negative effect on them . In my view everyone if know amount read
news
and
books
they can see benefits it ,if they don`t amount it they only see a negative effect in themselves.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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