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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table shows the information
of
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 sales in five countries
about
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of
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 Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 in 1999 and 2004.
According to
this
 table, Denmark had the highest level of
sale
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sales
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 in
coffee
 in 1999.
As
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 the opposite, Sweden showed the lowest level of
sale
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sales
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 in 2004. In 1999, the rate of
sale
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sales
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 of
bananas
 and
coffee
of
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the
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Belgium and Sweden
had
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stayed
nearly
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 1 million
of
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euros.
As
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 the same scale, these two countries had not been sharply
increase
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more
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 than 1 million
of
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euros in 2004. To compare the standard of
sale
 of
coffee
within
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 1999 to 2000 In
the
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Belgium,
sale
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the sale
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 of
bananas
 had steadily increased
0.7
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by 0.7
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 million
of
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euros.
Similarly
,
sale
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the sale
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 of
bananas
had
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went up 5.5 times in the UK.
The
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Switzerland was a
significantly
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 upward trend in the of
bananas
 from 1999 to 2004.
Likewise
,
the
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Sweden dropped
as
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a downward trend in the
sale
 of
bananas
from
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between
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 1999 and 2004. In conclusion, the rate of the
sale
 of
coffee
 in four
country
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 climbed and never decreased in the above table.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, sale with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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