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Write about the following topic: • Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #english #school #languages #risk
Nowadays
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 as important as cal languages because it allows people to speak with everyone despite their mother
language
. At a very young age children in school learn
English
 and some people privilege that
languages
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 to the local
language
. In my
opinion
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both
 subjects are important in order to preserve the traditional and international way of communication. Since I was 6 years old I used to learn
English
 in school and year after
years
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practicing
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 it became so much better. Two years ago I spent 6 months in London and thanks to my previous education I could freely express myself and perfect it. Even if I was there for a short time when I came back to school in Italy I struggled more with Italian
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 than
English
 tests. I believe that it was important for me to keep studying my local
language
 because it's fundamental to balance
both
. The truth is that
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culture is something to preserve and
honor
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 by learning the native
language
 in a scholastic context but
also
 exercising it in everyday life.
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, during my stay in the
UK
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 I kept my phone set
on
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 my
language
,
that
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 can help to don't risk
of
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dying out. In conclusion, learning
English
 is not more important than learning
native
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language
. In
fact
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both
 ways are important
both
 to communicate with people of the own country and all around the world.
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