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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that nations could achieve
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success
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economic
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the economic
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 aspect without
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a negative
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 impact on the environment,and
other
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others
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 believe
otherwise
. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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 that
it
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 feasible to accomplish prosper
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the economic
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economic
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as well as
healthy
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 environment. On the one hand, there are some members of society who hold
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that is
 impossible to have
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economic
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without making any damage to the environment. The reason behind
this
 idea is nowadays,
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most
of
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countries rely on fossil fuels in different sectors. For
exmaple
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, the factories
to
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produce food and clothes , vehicles
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 the roads , and production energy run by using traditional fuels, which can provide
cheapest
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 source of energy for people
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company making
profit
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a profit
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, which contributes to
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the economic
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economic
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 of the whole country, but with
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 amount of carbon footprint ,and
this
increase
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 the climate change and global warming.
On the other hand
, In my perspective, we can achieve success in economic and environmental
aspect
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aspects
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. The countries could invest money
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 environmentally friendly projects namely, renewable energy, reforestation,
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and public
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 transport.
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, solar and wind provide clean sources of electricity,
increase
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 plant of trees assist to absorb the CO2 from
atmosphere
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,
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 public transport help to reduce the number of cars on the roads.
Furthermore
, These
project
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projects
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 can assist countries to make economic progress
thorugh
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through
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 foreign investors . As
reuslt
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result
 a
,
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this
 can provide job
opportunites
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opportunities
 for local people and increase the funds the government can earn from people via taxes.
To sum up
, it seems to me that nations could improve their public
economic
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 without making detrimental consequences on the ecosystem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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