Some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
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people
believe that the school should teach students
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While
others say that school must teach childrens
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children
subjects
. This
essay will give some reasons to support both views.
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with, in more and more modern society these days, all people
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study
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studies
people
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subjects
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feel
study
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a diferent
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different
personality
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personalities
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many
students
like math so the other subjects
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is that
students
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subjects
are so heavy knowledge for children while
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On the other hand
, there are some arguments against that students
must study all subjects
.On top of that is
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subjects
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people
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Therefore
, people
should have further
consideration for this
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