Some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

In recent years, education has
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attracted
attached
the general
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public’s
attention. Some
people
believe that the school should teach
students
about
subjects
them
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they
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do ing well .
While
others say that school must teach
childrens
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children
all
subjects
.
This
essay will give some reasons to support both views.
To begin
with, in more and more modern society these days, all
people
care
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of
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about quality
study
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. The first reason that there are some
people
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who just
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want
them
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their
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children
learn
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to learn
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some
subjects
which can
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them
feeling
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fun or they are good at
study
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studying
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. Everyone will have
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a diferent
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diferent
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different
personality
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personalities
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so they will have more choice for what subject they want.
For example
, almost
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many
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students
like math so the other
subjects
teacher will not have enough
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lessons
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to teach,
it
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which
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will
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to
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their job. The second reason
that
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is that
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students
will not have free time
do
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homework and they can not hang out with their
friend
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friends
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; All
subjects
are so heavy knowledge for children
while
they really need to do
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like go camping, play soccer, go fishing...
On the other hand
, there are some arguments against that
students
must study all
subjects
.On top of
that is
in these day
people
just care about knowledge, they do not care
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about
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subjects
about
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ethics
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or exercise they do not enough
to
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for
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comprehensive development.
For
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the
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history subject is very
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important
for
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our life, the younger
people
must
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be remembered
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about
sacrifice
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of the
heros
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heroes
hero
in the war before; more than,
nowaday
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nowadays
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the physical
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education
should
be learn
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be learned
be learning
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because
the
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young
people
very lazy to action, they
need
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prepare high power for their life. In conclusion, from what has
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discussed
above.
the
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education is very important to
the
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society
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society's
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development.
Therefore
,
people
should have
further
consideration for
this
issue.
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  • discover their interests and strengths
  • basic understanding
  • interconnected world
  • higher motivation
  • deeper knowledge
  • mental health
  • reducing unnecessary stress
  • boredom
  • balanced approach
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