The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
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The diagram illustrates different stages in the process of manufacturing
bricks
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from the digging step to delivery. At the beginning of the process,
clay
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is dug from the ground.
Then
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, the
clay
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is put through a metal grid, and it passes onto a roller where it is mixed with sand and water. After that, the
clay
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can be shaped into
bricks
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in two ways: either it is put in a mould, or a wire cutter is used. At the fourth stage in the process, the
clay
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bricks
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are placed in a drying oven for one to two days.
Next,
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the
bricks
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are heated in a kiln at a moderate temperature (200 - 900 degrees Celsius) and
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at a high temperature (up to 1300 degrees Celsius), before spending two to three days in a cooling chamber.
Finally
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, the finished
bricks
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are packaged and delivered to be sold in the market.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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