The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
The diagram illustrates different stages in the process of manufacturing
bricks
from the digging step to delivery.
At the beginning of the process, Use synonyms
clay
is dug from the ground. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
clay
is put through a metal grid, and it passes onto a roller where it is mixed with sand and water. After that, the Use synonyms
clay
can be shaped into Use synonyms
bricks
in two ways: either it is put in a mould, or a wire cutter is used.
At the fourth stage in the process, the Use synonyms
clay
Use synonyms
bricks
are placed in a drying oven for one to two days. Use synonyms
Next,
the Linking Words
bricks
are heated in a kiln at a moderate temperature (200 - 900 degrees Celsius) and Use synonyms
then
at a high temperature (up to 1300 degrees Celsius), before spending two to three days in a cooling chamber. Linking Words
Finally
, the finished Linking Words
bricks
are packaged and delivered to be sold in the market.Use synonyms
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