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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holiday. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages ?

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Nowadays, some
employers
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 expected that they have the right to call their
employees
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 at any
time
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 including
vacation
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days
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 and their staff should answer their calls.
Although
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this
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 development has a
lot
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 of benefits, it has drawbacks.
to begin
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 with, The advantages of receiving calls from
employers
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 after
work
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 hours or on holiday
days
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, First of all, if the worker answers the phone, he/she will get extra money on top of his/ her pay cheque.
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, answering
employers
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' calls on holidays, makes
employers
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 feel that their staff love their
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 and they might get promoted or raise their salary in return.
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, it will help workplaces to significantly grow and increase profits.
For example
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, some companies pay more than 200 dollars for their workers if they answer
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 calls
while
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 they are on
vacation
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days
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.
To sum up
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,
this
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 development could have so many positive impacts on both
employees
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 and
employers
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.
On the other hand
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,
This
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 trend may have some negative impacts on
employees
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such
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 as, they feel that they are under stress for a long
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 and don't have enough
time
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 to relax
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 they end up making a
lot
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 of mistakes at
work
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.
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, it decreases their performance and productivity at
work
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. Not only
employees
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 will be impacted negatively but
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employers
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 as it will increase turning over of staff which it will cost
employers
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 a
lot
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 of money to hire and train new
employees
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.
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, a
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 of
employees
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 suffer from depression
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 of feeling that they don't have the right to relax even during their
vacation
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days
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.
To sum up
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, accessing
employers
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 to their workers all the
time
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 will bring a
lot
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 of disadvantages for both. In conclusion, many
employees
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 want their
employees
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 to be accessible all the
time
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 even on
vacation
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days
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. The benefits of
this
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 development outweigh its disadvantages.

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