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Nowadays, more and more information and resources related to arts and entertainment are being digitized. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, a lot of arts, and entertainment information and resources are being digitalised. I believe
this
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 trend has more drawbacks than benefits. in view of the
value
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 and the number of information On the positive points,
firstly
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, Everyone can see those
works
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 and arts whenever and wherever people are. It is convenient for both
of
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customers
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 and Organisers because Organizers don't need to pay the location price and find the places and
customers
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 don't need to go to particular
location
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.
However
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, On the negative points, there are two examples of it Al
first,
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it is difficult to feel the atmosphere and scales of the
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,
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 because
customers
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 have to see a lot of
works
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 on the screen of
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the smartphone, which
coulder
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could
 tell them how wonderful the
works
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 are correctly.
Secondly
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, it has
that
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 risks
to be
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of being
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 copied by others on the internet, which leads to
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a decrease in
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 the
value
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 of the
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works
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work
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. Those
works
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 are precious because of rareness, so if
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chenamber
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chamber
chambers
 of them increased,
the
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value
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 of them would be lower. In conclusion,
although
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 it is convenient for
customers
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 to see the
works
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 everywhere, it has risks
o
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to
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 give
customers
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cheap
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a cheap
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 impression of the
works
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.
Also
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, the
value
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 of chem would be
to
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too
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 damaged because of much work.
Therefore
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, the negative points outweigh the positive ones
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