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Professional workers like doctors’ nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to the society, so they should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that nowadays society can’t do without professional
workers
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’ contribution, but it is
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 important to build personal entertainment and hold sports events. People may have different opinions on whether
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 more for professional
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. I disagree that we should be paid more professional
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. Compared with the
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 we meet professional
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, the
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 we spend by ourselves is more than it. It was obvious that the
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 of our
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 is focused on our daily life. If not necessary, we don’t need to meet professional
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.
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, we only make an appointment with the doctor when we get the disease,
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 the nurses.
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, we focus on our daily routine. Doing sports and keeping a good mood
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 the base of health. These strategies can reduce the possibility of getting the disease. It is a common fact that there are plenty of advantages to sports.
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 the mood. In conclusion, professional
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 are an important character in our life, we shouldn’t forget that only the
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 we need looking for help,
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 we communicate with professional
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. Some professional
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 can be
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. So, I disagree that we should pay more professional
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