The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
The maps display the current
area
of Norbiton Industrial and the new design of the future of the site.
Overall
, the future development is replacing the factory with a housing
area
, which is located in the East of town. New facilities
such
as shops, medical centres, schools, and playgrounds are planned to establish as well.
Additionally
, Farmland will be moved to the new
area
too. In the present day, the map depicts that the circular is at the East of town and it is surrounded by the Factories.
Moreover
,
this
circular is
also
connected to the main road. At the North of town is Farmland, which is separated by the river. Shifting to the new design in the future, an
area
where
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is originally the
Factories
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Factory
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is turning into a housing zone with new amenities, which are shops, a medical centre, a playground, and a school respectively.
However
, all new buildings are still based on the same side as the current design, which is
at
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the East. Interestingly, the river is separated into two sides by the road, which is newly constructed. Farmland is
also
relocated to the right corner of the map(North-East)
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