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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives ad their personal lives. Do you thing the advaatges of taking risks outweigh the disadvanatges?

#people #risks #lives #ad #advaatges #disadvanatges
Taking
risks
are
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 really vital for
people
 either for their personal
lives
 or their work
lives
. I believe that the negative effects to take
risks
 are greater than
positive
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the positive
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 ones.
However
,
this
is depend
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 on what
in
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apply
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stages
people
’s life, the younger the better
people
taking
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take
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risks
.
This
 essay will describe
about
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this
 issue
further
. On the one hand, taking
risks
 are needed in
people
’s life, especially when
someone
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they
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 are younger. The reasons are without taking
risk
 someone cannot move forward ad they
are
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also
 will not
experiences
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experience
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what
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apply
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the challenges
their
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of their
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 future will be.
For example
,
people
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for people
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 in
age
 early 20s who want to start a business, taking a
risk
 is required to take a new step. Businessmen should start taking the opportunity and take a different way to look different and unique so that they can compete with the market and with their
rival
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rivals
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. Another reason is taking a
risk
in
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at
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the
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a
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 younger
age
 can make up because they can run a plan B or other plans. On the one hand, most of the time
people
 who turn in to
age
 40s or even 50s
is
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are
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 not wise to take
a
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apply
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risks
over
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in
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 their professional
lives
 and personal
lives
. Regards professional
lives
, it is hard to change their career path because
the
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failure and learning from failure are appropriate when
people
still
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are still
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in
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at
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the
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a
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 younger
age
, so they can make up
form
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for
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 the failure easily.
Moreover
,
for
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in
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 personal
lives
,
people
 in the
age
 around 40s to 50s are not easy to make a relationship
.
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with.
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 Their peers are already having
the
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stable personal
lives
 and already
focuses
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focus
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 on their own family. So it is late to
taking
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take
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risk
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risks
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 in the over mature
age
.
To sum up
, taking
risks
are
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is
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 pivotal for
people
 in facing their
live
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 both
professional
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their professional
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lives
 and personal
lives
. I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages especially
people
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for people
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 who turn on
age
 40s and 50s.
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