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Public transit (e.g. buses, local trains, metros/subways) play an important role in helping residents and visitors get around large cities Public transit should be free at all times for those who want to use it. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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around
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big cities, public
transit
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 an important role
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 both residents and locals.
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 writing will highlight the view of public
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 free uses by mentioning the good side and the bad side. On the one hand, complimentary public transportation can give many benefits.
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it will reduce road traffic,
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 the risk of a traffic accident may decrease.
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if people start to use public
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, it will give economic benefits because of the
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 of gasoline.
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, free transportation uses will increase people’s health awareness.
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, Japan, a country that has a large number of mass
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 users,
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 many stairs in the hallway.
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, Japan become one of a country with a high life expectancy.
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, urban transportation can be misused. Despite
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 no cost, some people can not take care of public facilities uses.
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, in Indonesia, for exact in Jakarta, a city with many public transportations, there was a case of commuters that
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 not disciplined in entering the bus line. They think that because the facility is free,
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they do not have to pay attention to the rule. In conclusion, how good the facility that government gives, depends on how the locals can maintain the use of those facilities. Based on my opinion, complimentary public transport is very helpful and useful. But, commuters should watch their attitudes or the government can make strict regulations for public transport uses,
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 the public facilities can be well maintained.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the structure of the introduction and conclusion to better present the main topic and your stance. Also, ensure that all ideas are connected and organized in a logical sequence.
task achievement
Your response is generally complete and provides clear ideas, but some points lack development and examples. Provide more specific examples and expand on your ideas to further support your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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