Some people think that schoolchildren should not be allowed to use their smartphones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern world, people said that schoolchildren should not be allowed to

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their smartphones. ,

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statement. In

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I will move on to consider why I agree. There are a

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reasons for

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situation. First of all , a few children take photos of their teachers and posted in social media

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as tik tok and Snapchat .

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, some students don'

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pay attention to the lessons .

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, when I was studying in

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. There is one student using her phone under the table because the class was very busy and the teacher didn'

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see her .

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, if they will

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their mobile phones, they will rely on them. They might not think about the answer when the teacher asks any questions, they will search on the internet and find the answer . As a

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result they will have in the future low think.

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, if we do limit

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, it would help them to like the

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more.

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, in the break .

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, many of them like to take photos with their friends to make memories in the future .

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, the

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can punish, those who don'

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follow the rules. In conclusion, schoolchildren shouldn'

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be allowed to

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their phones in class .

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, schools can put rules for how long and what time for using. In my view, children are bored very quickly in

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they want to

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their phones, but the

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can do self-activities and funny, so they will forget their smartphones .

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