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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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Food
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 security is the top priority for every country around the world. Some
people
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 think that their governments should look to encourage eating
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insects
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 since the population is raise,
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 others argue that eating
insects
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 is dangerous and
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phenomelo
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phenomenon
 will
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to
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the environment
nature
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of nature
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 life.
In
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 my part, I think two ideas will have benefits and drawbacks so
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 essay will outline some pros and cons to support both views In more and more
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modern
 society these days.
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food
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, which topic very important to
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people
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 lives. when the population an increasing,
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 must find more
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food
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 sources.On the one hand, there are some
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thinks
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 that they should use
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insects
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 to
eating
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 as
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they
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 have many benefits.
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, almost
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eating
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eat
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 ants, bees,
dragonfly
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dragonflies
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, ..., all of them very easy to find if you stay
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 villages near the farms or the fields.
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, some
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farmers
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who
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can catch
insects
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 from the fields and
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bring it
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 to
public
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place
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 to sell so it will be cheaper
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than
another foods
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another food
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.
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, there are some
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 give some argues against that
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people
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 to eat
insects
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. On top of
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an
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insects
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 very dangerous more than
people
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 know, the toxin will have inside
an
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insects
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insects
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, which can
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to
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apply
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people
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people's
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 health like
headache
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 or stomach-ache,
itching
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 on the skin..., One
importants
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important
 reason is that if
people
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 overexploitation
insects
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 make unbalance the natural
ecosyterm
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ecosystem
. More than
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 so negative if the children
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have
not
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no
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 knowledge about
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 and if they
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 every
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insects
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insect
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,
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 the issue should be worry for their health. In short, from what has
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 above. The
food
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 sources will have pros and cons.
People
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 should have
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 information about the
food
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, special the
food
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 from
insects
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food scarcity
  • edible insects
  • nutritional benefits
  • cultural barriers
  • psychological barriers
  • mainstream food source
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmentally sustainable
  • economic benefits
  • local farmers
  • health safety
  • allergies
  • pesticides
  • pollutants
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • regulations
  • hygiene
  • unforeseen consequences
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