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The given bar chart illustrates information about average weekly expenditure by households in a particular nation between 1968 and 2018.

The given bar chart illustrates information about average weekly expenditure by households in a particular nation between 1968 and 2018.
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It is clear that
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 four
categories
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 decreased from 1968 to 2018
while
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 spending on three different
categories
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 increased in the end. Only one figure showed no change. In terms of decreased
categories
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, the food section showed
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 change. In 1968, 35
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percent
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per cent
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 of families spent their income on food but it dramatically reduced to around 17
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percent
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per cent
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 after 40 years. The figure for clothing and
footware
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footwear
also
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 significantly dropped from 10
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percent
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per cent
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 to 5
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percent
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 in the end. Two more
categories
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, fuel and power and personal goods slightly fell as well. With
the
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reference to increased sections, spending on leisure was the biggest growth. It increased more than double from around 9
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percent
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per cent
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 to approximately 23
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percent
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per cent
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. Spending on housing
was
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increased almost double from 10
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percent
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per cent
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 to below 20
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percent
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per cent
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. The figure for transport rose from around 8
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percent
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per cent
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 to below 15
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percent
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per cent
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in
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at
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 the end. Only spending on household goods did not change and reached approximately 8
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percent
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per cent
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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