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Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilisers and better machinery. However, some of the methods used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays,
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 the development of machinery and fertilizers, the productivity of
food
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 has become ubiquitously inexpensive.
In contrast
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, deleterious effects are likely to be observed on human health and local communities.Personally, I am in complete disagreement with the fact that
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 use will adversely affect our society and
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 essay will elaborate on my optimistic view on
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 topic. On the one hand, utilizing
fertilisers
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 is able to boost the
quality
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 of
food
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 production. To grow crops, the requirements of crop growth are needed to be satisfied. With
fertilisers
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, those demands are likely to be met with full efficiency when it promotes an increase in the
quality
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 of land, leading to a thriving rise in
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quality
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. Admittedly,
fertilisers
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 are unlikely to meet optimal safety.
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, with the advancement of technology, the disadvantages of itself will able to be minimized
On the other hand
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, with the application of modern machinery, the boost of productivity of
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 will likely be witnessed positively. Harvesting crops require labour-intensive jobs imposing constraints on the speed of productivity, making the profitability of its fields inconsistently low.
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, applying those modern machines will help farmers be free from the burden of their work. Leading to improved standards of living among farmers
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also
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 maintaining the
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 of the
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 itself. In conclusion, with all of the aforementioned points above, using
fertilisers
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 and machinery possess potential effects on our society
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