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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in a health care centre since 2005.
Overall
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, the main building has been expanded and restructured.
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 the garden has been reduced in size, the car park has been enlarged to serve more patients. A new minor operations
room
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 has been erected in the top left-hand corner of the main building. All
the
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three consulting rooms have been narrowed and relocated to the bottom right-hand corner of the building, and one more consulting
room
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 has been established. The entrance has
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 been moved to the southwest of the building, next to the new location of the reception desk and in close proximity to a new children's play area.
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 the office has been reduced in size, the main hall has been broadened and more seats have been added around the hall. The physiotherapy
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 has remained unchanged since 2005. The car parking area has been expanded to make
room
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 for 18 new parking slots.
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, the size of the garden has been cut down by half. The fences have been relocated in accordance with the new areas for the car park and the garden
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